1. “Guess my name,” — Spoken by: Eddie.
2. “No, it is not. Guess again.” — Spoken by: Eddie.
3. “Well, Willie Brown.” — Spoken by: Mother.
4. “Not right! Not right! Try again.” — Spoken by: Eddie.
Rewrite A: “Now you are right,” said Eddie.
Check: Comma inside quotation marks after right,; lower-case said; period after Eddie.
Rewrite B: “O, now I know who it is. Eddie Jones,” said mother.
Check: Capital O,; comma after O,; period after is.; capital Eddie Jones, with comma before the closing quotation mark.
Target Sentence from Memory:
“One day Eddie stood on a stool behind his mother's chair, and put his hands over her eyes.”
Key Elements to Verify: Capital O in One; proper noun Eddie; possessive apostrophe in mother's; comma before the conjunction and; period at the conclusion.
| Domain | Exemplary (25) | Proficient (20) | Developing (15) | Beginning (10) | Teacher Feedback |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1. Speaker Attribution | Correctly attributes all 4 dialogue quotes to Eddie and Mother. | Correctly attributes 3 quotes; 1 slip. | Correctly attributes 2 quotes; confuses speaker turns. | Fails to identify speakers accurately. | |
| 2. Quotation Punctuation | Accurate placement of “ ”, internal commas, and closing tags. | Minor punctuation error (e.g. comma placed outside quotes). | Omits opening or closing quotation marks; misplaced comma. | No quotation marks used; severe punctuation breakdown. | |
| 3. Memory Transcription | Flawless recall of opening sentence including apostrophe in mother's. | 1 minor wording or spelling slip in transcription. | Omits apostrophe or key prepositional clause (*behind his mother's chair*). | Fragmented recall; missing major portions of the sentence. | |
| 4. Handwriting & Neatness | Neat cursive or print, regular letter sizing, well-spaced words. | Legible handwriting with minor spacing irregularity. | Crowded letters; several messy erasures. | Illegible handwriting; lines drift above or below baselines. |