1. Mother's Place: “Eddie's mother is comfortably sitting in a chair [or rocking chair].”
2. Hands & Work: “She has been holding her needlework and sewing in her hands.”
3. Eddie's Position: “Little Eddie is standing on a foot-stool, right behind the chair.”
4. Playful Action: “With a gentle smile, Eddie puts his hands over his mother's eyes.”
Exemplar Student Paragraph:
Mother is sitting in a rocking chair with quiet sewing in her hands. Little Eddie climbed onto a foot-stool right behind the chair so he could reach her shoulders. Then he laughed softly and placed both hands over his mother's eyes to play a guessing game.
Note: Ensure student paragraph incorporates all 5 required phrases naturally with smooth transitional flow.
Exemplar Question: “Mother, can you guess which little boy is covering your eyes?” (Must end with a question mark ‘?’ and begin with a capital letter).
Exemplar Prediction: “I think mother will smile, guess many funny names, and then turn around to give Eddie a warm hug.”
| Domain | Exemplary (25) | Proficient (20) | Developing (15) | Beginning (10) | Teacher Feedback |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1. Phrase Integration | Flawlessly incorporates all 5 phrases into grammatically sound clauses. | Incorporates 4–5 phrases with minor syntactic stiffness. | Uses 2–3 phrases; misses prepositional completeness. | Omits required phrases or writes disjointed fragments. | |
| 2. Narrative Cohesion | Rich narrative flow connecting mother's sewing and Eddie's game. | Clear sequence describing the scene logically. | Simple list of sentences without strong narrative connection. | Confusing, incomplete, or unrelated statements. | |
| 3. Question & Prediction | Inquisitive question with ‘?’ and creative, plausible future prediction. | Valid question and prediction with basic detail. | Question lacks ‘?’ or prediction lacks logical connection. | Missing either question or prediction task. | |
| 4. Mechanics & Penmanship | Exemplary penmanship, proper spacing, zero spelling slips. | Clean handwriting with 1–2 minor capitalization slips. | Multiple capitalization or period errors. | Pervasive run-ons, illegible lines, lowercase starters. |